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I save a seat for silence beside me in the plane;
the chattering ape-boy behind me leans forward,
trying to strangle my neighbor. I smile,
teeth hissing death-wish for lax parental units.
Children are so lovely.

When you and I watch the clouds soar by,
or better yet, envelop us in too-thick love,
we drown a little in our own lungs.
Don’t touch me, oh don’t touch me please.
I have interpersonal rabies.

The daydreamed figures dance like boy scouts,
but they can sell like girl scouts too.
I am almost convinced, though these days
I only buy knives that cannot go in the dishwasher.
And I peel onions bravely.

I try to tell this to the stewardess, that vague distracted girl,
saying “Fly me” with her eyes wide in the commercial.
Now she offers me soda and peanuts with
that dripping, too-congenial smile. I grimace,
Blood sugar level skyrocketing.

Give me no saccharine stranger, please God,
if it is You whose acquaintance I met half an hour ago,
for I thought that You reached out to shake my hand
from a nebulous heaven beyond the window.
Such a firm grip, too.

These days it seems a man will either
snap your hand and splinter your fingers
or treat your knucklebones as eggshells.
Sometimes, Lord, I wonder if You’re listening,

if I could eat my peanuts in peace.
Written for =PoetryPlease's challenge about pet peeves... I think perhaps the heart of my irritation may be a little too big.

Here, as you will see, I drift from sarcasm to daydreaming; reality to fantasy, if you will. Give me a break, it's hard to fit my schizophrenic self onto paper.
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dyrwen Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2007  Hobbyist Writer
I enjoyed the feeling of seeing one on the plane with a smile, as they imagine something far worse. Like the chattering-ape behind or the concept of "interpersonal rabies".

It's quite lovely in its prose and rather clever.
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inklover Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2007
ingeniously done:clap: thats what i love about yur style of writing, it is thought provoking, and the imagery is great. loved it :heart:
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sweetcapris Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2006
Omygosh, i didnt mean to say that four times. ahh. computer stupidity. gaa
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yellowroses Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2006
:giggle: 'Sokay. This site can be mercurial. And you really drove your message home... Thanks again for taking the time to read and respond.
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sweetcapris Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2006
wow. i really couldnt even follow up to those previous comments. holy crap. I'm usually not so "intimidated" when congratulating someone on a poem well done. but alas... i will make this comment simple, seeing as the page is filled with crazy social concepts and "spaghetti codes" that are far past what i could say. but anyway, GREAT POEM!! gee. and i enjoyed the comments nearly as much. lol. thumbs up, add fav!
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sweetcapris Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2006
wow. i really couldnt even follow up to those previous comments. holy crap. I'm usually not so "intimidated" when congratulating someone on a poem well done. but alas... i will make this comment simple, seeing as the page is filled with crazy social concepts and "spaghetti codes" that are far past what i could conjure. but anyway, GREAT POEM!! gee. and i enjoyed the comments nearly as much. lol. thumbs up, add fav!
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sweetcapris Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2006
wow. i really couldnt even follow up to those previous comments. holy crap. I'm usually not so "intimidated" when congratulating someone on a poem well done. but alas... i will make this comment simple, seeing as the page is filled with crazy social concepts and "spaghetti codes" that are far past what i could say. but anyway, GREAT POEM!! gee. and i enjoyed the comments nearly as much. lol. thumbs up, add fav!
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sweetcapris Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2006
wow. i really couldnt even follow up to those previous comments. holy crap. I'm usually not so "intimidated" when congratulating someone on a poem well done. but alas... i will make this comment simple, seeing as the page is filled with crazy social concepts and "spaghetti codes" that are far past what i could say. but anyway, GREAT POEM!! gee. and i enjoyed the comments nearly as much. lol. thumbs up, add fav!
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yellowroses Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2006
Yeah, I can understand how you'd be intimidated-- there are some pretty intense comments hereabouts haha. Thanks for braving all that. I am glad to hear that you like this poem; antisocial misanthropes should unite! (But that might be self-defeating.)
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sweetcapris Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2006
hhahaha it would be self defeating, unless of course, we each had our own little corner equipped with a blank wall.

Keep cool! :hug: <oh wait>, you dont like to be touched. ahh. air hugs.
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